Hey–it’s NANOWRIMO! For those of you taking part in the annual National Novel Writers’ Month, you should already be at least 1667 words into your new project. And you probably shouldn’t be browsing the blogs. But if, like me, you are close to your word goal for the day, and you’re kind of hung up on how to write the next scene, then feel free to browse away. Otherwise–get back to work.
I read a lot of manuscripts by new authors, either because they seek me out for blurbs, agent advice, or marketing ideas, or through events like the WorldCon Writers’ Workshop. I see the same kinds of mistakes over and over, so I’d like to give you a run-down on five of them.
- They don’t know where to begin. This usually means they start weeks, months, even years before anything actually happens in the story. Begin as close as possible to the moment when all hell breaks loose. That’s when it gets exciting–when the character is about to encounter the conflict.
2. They include too much back-story up front. This can be a subset of mistake #1, by starting in the pre-history of the story, but often it manifests as the author trying to squeeze all kinds of character commentary or inner monologue in the first few pages. Let the reader get to know the characters first by seeing them in action, then when they want to know more, give it to them.
3. They write in summary rather than in scenes. Scenes include action taking place surrounded by details that bring the reader into a particular moment in space and time. All five senses, forward momentum, dialog and revelation. Let the reader be a witness to the scene, not merely an accessory after the fact.
4. They write scenes that don’t add to the work. These scenes are often transitional: scenes where someone has to go somewhere, or wait for something, or listen to a version of something that already happened. This is what summary is for–when we need to know something happened, but we don’t need any details or investment in the process. Unless something happens on that long ride through the forest, you can just say, “Four days later, they arrived at the castle.”
5. They lose track of characters in dialog. The dialog consists entirely of the quotations, without any sense of characters being present in a place. Instead, use your dialog tags judiciously to show how characters react to what’s being said, and reveal themselves through small actions, expressions, and interactions with the scene around them.
Hope this helps as you dive into or revise your project–happy writing!